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janine fay's avatar

Whoa! I never even noticed the missing pronoun till I read the comments! Apparently too subtle for me.

Anyway, I know how she feels. My first response, when I heard the results of the presidential election, was FUCK NO!!! I don’t wanna die while he’s the prez……

Good one Bill. Thank you

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Sarah Abel's avatar

that was profound. like, like, like.

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Bob Eno's avatar

Nice idea artfully conveyed, even though Von Bargen has no outlets within 800 miles (never heard of it). Yet these virtues have not helped to insert the missing "us" in line 1.

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William A Nelson's avatar

You are a close reader. Thanks a ton. I wanted a barely noticeable third person, an absent third person, as a kind of ditto of the absent Joan.

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Bob Eno's avatar

A risky ploy, but basically it worked. I unknowingly supplied a whispered "us" first time through. But, you know, the second time through the left brain always barges in looking for the chance to raise its hand and get attention. And now, with your reply suggesting "them," it has begun to ponder all three poems

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